Experimenting with Metaphors
As I noted in my post Working with My Writing Style, I’m a linear thinker. I’ve been looking for ways to get my creative juices flowing so I can be a better writer. Metaphors have always been hard for my literal brain to write, so that seems like a great place to start.
In this post I’ll take lines from some of my poems and rewrite them as metaphors.
Like a colony of ants, strong as one,
the statue was dismantled.
They were a colony of ants, strong as one,
dismantling the statue.
Like inverted goose bumps, alive against the flesh.
My memories are inverted goose bumps, alive against the flesh of my past.
Timing never right, we shoved our feelings into the recesses.
Like patchwork quilts stored for the summer.
Timing never right. Our feelings were patchwork quilts
shoved into the dark corner of the wardrobe for the season.
Another Metaphor option:
Timing never right. We shoved our patchwork quilted
feelings into the dark corner of the wardrobe for the season.
Treading lightly so as not to disturb
the delicate balance of my life.
I am a tightrope walker, treading lightly
through my life.
They drift apart
then come crashing
They are locked in a
Rom-Com that has overplayed
the meet/cute story line,
waiting for the writer to
These are obviously primitive and need work, but it was a good exercise for my brain to see, and use, words differently to convey the same ideas.
What exercises or experiments do you do to improve your writing?
I think we can all learn from each other. How would you rewrite some of my original lines as metaphors?